User blog comment:Alex Martin Rider/Thoughts on my Black Ops fanfic/@comment-1967485-20100705013507

Wait, So are you gonna mention other characters. Seems like people you like get parts. Basically, Im saying MAKE a chapters longer. Its quick and swift and not descriptive. The time difference is like 30 minutes in a brief 5 minutes. My advice is make chapters longer, include rendom people saying "What about team three, we gonna leave'em behind?" But by that time i guess im late. An over turned boat is also kinda "newbie". Remember, SOG would probably use rubber boats and not metal.