User blog comment:Alex Martin Rider/Thoughts on my Black Ops fanfic/@comment-2128115-20100724030313

Dude, what about my charcter? For all we know, he may have stolen a Kar98K from a dead Viet cong, or a SVD, and shot the one guy, or, he may have pullen out of his knife, and murdered someone, and Hienrich telling everyone "The bastards killed him", I mean, No one likes it when you spend hours and hours to not get mentioned, it's no fun, it's NO fun at all, Infact, Not to be mean, but you prolly should mention all the people signed up, or you'll have NO-ONE on your next Fanfic but like, 3 people, Even the snipers don't get mentioned, As I said before, We need to be more mentioned, and don't make your guy steal some kills and make them look "Badass", Instead, you should mention each soldier with atleast one or two dramatic,juicy, kills, like throwing a pistol and getting in this huge knife fight, your knives hit people, as the sparks burn your skin, burnng your eyelashes, then, you get lucky and stab him and kill him, and then, another Viet Cong/ Russian comes near with a Sword/Katana, and you quickly aim your knife, throwing it, nailing him in the center of the chest, and you stealing his Sword/Katana, and you make another guy have this JUICY kill