User blog comment:Alex Martin Rider/Thoughts on my Black Ops fanfic/@comment-2128115-20100703172635

Want I mean, Is like, after being on the overturned boat, kinda upsetting, Everyone gets captured by Vietcong, Instead of the Team Three being blown to pieces or something, or atleast dying, it would make the story really boring without Team Three, I mean, Less people- Less action,less drama, less everything, but if you kinda of a twist, all the juicy drama and action and stuff would be there, Instead of the first chapter a whole team dying, Maybe perhaps the 3rd or 4th chapter, maybe someone getting a hand blown off, or something, I would say save deaths till the middle-end cause then alot more people would stay tuned in, And even people not even in it, Basicly, Short term: Make it dramatic with alot of action, but do death just yet.